The New Girl At West Haven Academy

The New Girl At West Haven Academy

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Marks By Markss Updated Oct 03, 2011

(watty awards) When lisbeth arrives at the new prestigious school her cousin goes to she automatically fits in.  But when her heart starts feeling things it shouldn't is when everything takes a turn for the worst. Her heart being torn in two. Knowing which one she should choose. But her feelings are also strong for the other. Deaths, secrets, lies, and pain wreck her life. How can she continue when everything falls apart. Her life slowly seems to crumble  unless someone can help her.

Calynn131 Calynn131 Jul 03, 2013 02:06AM
I have a suggestion 
                                    If you put less space between each paragraph, it would be easier to read.
I agree with everyone that it could use a few more details, but you've already got so much drama waiting to happen: a new school, a new house, a brother with cancer. Great start!
Few grammar errors that I'm pretty sure you'll fix. It's yet another werewolf story, no offense, but I'm really getting tired of reading these. You're a very good writer though and it's interesting, being the new girl ;)
okay so it didnt suck...dont put yourself down like that lol <3 anyway its good so far....=] <3
Markss Markss Jul 10, 2011 11:11PM
@VFC1DLove thanks! ill edit it towards the end of the chapter. :D
Markss Markss Jul 09, 2011 06:16PM
@doggieluverrr thanks so much! im glad you do(:
                                     @hbrooks thank you, it means a lot that you like it :D