I'm a mermans mate ?!?!

I'm a mermans mate ?!?!

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rosiline2000 By rosiline2000 Updated Jul 03, 2015

As I'm walking threw the cafe an order my drink the weather Chanel
 says don't go out in the water a huge storms going to approach . I think to myself well that's never stopped me before ..... Hey you might be thinking well your stupid but I'm the all time champion surfer I have to practice twice every day to keep my title an no stupid storms gonna stop me besides I was just out there what's the worst that could go wrong ? ( Looking for an editor to help with the grammar an reminding me to update message me if your interested thanks ) Not updating till I find an editor

Romanoph Romanoph Aug 16
I couldn't  understand a word because there are no punctuation
It was great good job and everyone else is right too👏👍
Can you use "parentheses" when the people are talking it's very confusing
You should put " marks around the conversations like, I was about to head out of the house when my mom called out to me. "Make sure to call me okay?" And add more detail it will help alot
furher_beccalouise furher_beccalouise Jul 25, 2015
Your book is starting out really nice just some of your sentences do not make sense, but other than that it's good