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the same (jeff the killer love story)

the same (jeff the killer love story)

13.3K Reads 421 Votes 11 Part Story
Pandora Reavis By PandoraReavis Completed

a girl named luna who has powers and  snow white skin  was made fun of all her life and now she meets a crazy killer?

Lack of punctuation is infuriating, grammar looks like a 5th graders, they're are a small amount of spelling errors and the oc is stereotypical and insulting.
Campos1976 Campos1976 Jul 07, 2016
WOW!!!!! Your story is awesome!!!!!!!!😝😝😝 BUT CONFUSING😬 because I don't see any P.O.V changes and .......ITS CONFUSING.NO OFFENSE!!!!! I Still like ur story !!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Purdysaurus_Rex Purdysaurus_Rex Apr 27, 2016
No offense because this is a good story, but there is literally 0% grammar in this. Especially the P.O.V changes. And speech? Why no speech marks? (Sorry I'm on the grammar police and can't help it, no offense intended)
falconluver falconluver Dec 12, 2016
grammar's good use of punctuation is really really bad. I think u just use periods. Dude plz fix dis. The plot is nice and good but the punctuation is real bad. I wanna help but I think I cant coz I have many projects to do. But I still wanna help you write this
A_H_S_2781 A_H_S_2781 Dec 03, 2016
I could rewrite this for you if you want I'll give you all credit I just want t make sure the grammar and stuff is correct
SkyLight_3 SkyLight_3 Jul 10, 2016
U have no pov changes or quotes around things people say. U stink at writing but u have good ideas