An 18 life is about to go down in a spiral of blood gore and girls. One his birthday he goes out and gets turned. Does he know that he will be a powerful vampire or will he be more.
Oh if you read this post comments please even if it's crtizim (hate spellin the hard way which is correctly)
I really like it. I hope there is more. The only parts you might want to fix are spelling (which I can't talk cuz I am a horrible speller lol) and maybe separate the dialogue. Give each character their own paragraph when they r talking. It just makes it easier to read. I loved it though!