The Discoveratory

The Discoveratory

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Amber Fortune By ToutMonCoeur Updated Nov 17, 2010

When Moss first heard about the Discoveratory, she wasn't sure it was real. But the deeper she delves, the closer she gets to finding the answers behind the mysterious disappearances...

ToutMonCoeur ToutMonCoeur Aug 08, 2010
Thanks for the feedback! Yeah I originally wrote it fast paced because I planned on it being very short, but I'm probably going to slow down the next part as Moss travels to Iceland and discovers some interesting information. :)
Shoneeze Shoneeze Aug 08, 2010
you have a really great concept, but it's way too fast passed.
                              try slowing it down an paying more attention to detail.
                              also thumbs up on the grammer:)