I Promise To Love You Tomorrow

I Promise To Love You Tomorrow

886 Reads 44 Votes 10 Part Story
GabiGeranium By GabiGeranium Updated Jul 28, 2015

Set in the 1950's this story follows the dilemmas of Sally White as she struggles between her child and home, her alcoholic husband and her lover Jack. For years Sally has submissively followed her husbands lead, covering his tracks at every turn in order to keep their clean reputation. But after her daughter has an unexplained accident things take on a new turn. Michael realises his need to reform, but at the same time Sally realises how hopeless hoping for a change is. Driven to a newcomer through his gentle kindness it isn't long before Sally winds up in his arms.

  • 1950s
  • abuse
  • affair
  • alcohol
  • blackmail
  • domestic
  • family
  • hate
  • heartbreak
  • housewife
  • husband
  • lies
  • love
  • marriage
  • reputation
  • retro
  • society
  • triangle
  • vintage
  • wife
cradle_life cradle_life Jun 06, 2015
very cool to see things through Michael's eyes, it makes me feel for him. Now that Jack and Sally have been officially introduced, I'm wondering what will happen :) I like the dialogue between Michael, Jack, and Doug :)
cradle_life cradle_life Jun 06, 2015
poor Sally she sure has to handle a lot :( I one of my best friend's dad was an alcoholic  and I know it really sucks. Nice beginning :)
Davrielle Davrielle Jan 29, 2015
Didn't they just meet last night? It's a bit odd that he would love someone so soon -- unless there is a time lapse. 
                              
                              Also, if you're going to switch points of view, make sure to separate with a # or *** it is difficult to keep up with different points of views in this way
Davrielle Davrielle Jan 29, 2015
How old is Amy? I was imagining a little kid. Establish her age from the beginning so the reader can tap into the characters and scene. You don't even have to give a set age. Even attitude and physical appearance descriptions can help a reader.
Davrielle Davrielle Jan 29, 2015
Michael should think of what kind of person Sally is like and compare to Amy. What drives Michael to say this? As readers, we need to know what kind of person Sally is through Michael's eyes.
Davrielle Davrielle Jan 29, 2015
I had to highlight and comment on this. You should use more of this kind of writing to describe your characters.