My Dominant Alpha

My Dominant Alpha

55.4K Reads 1.4K Votes 7 Part Story
SugarXPlumb By SugarXPlumb Updated Dec 03, 2017

You'll Just Have To Find Out . ; )

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Purplecats000 Purplecats000 Nov 03, 2017
Its too cliche and rushed, like the first chapter. You need more character development. You should also seperate your writing into paragraphs so its not one huge jumble of words. Try to use less worn out words.
violetgirl99876 violetgirl99876 Feb 15, 2016
Nice I really like your starting maybe you could add a bit more commotion and stuff In it otherwise I love it !!!!!!!:):):):):):):))::£:£):)