the Not So Villainous Tales of Super Villainy

the Not So Villainous Tales of Super Villainy

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OliverTwist96 By OliverTwist96 Completed

Do you remember the days you poured over a brightly adorned, prime colored paperback book filled with the victories and follies of certain superhuman entities? The days you ran about outside on the front lawn with a dish towel tied to your back pretending you could fly or smash through buildings? Can you picture the millions of dollars spent upon entertainment with caped crusaders upon the film strips crashing through buildings and clasping tightly to the damsel in distress?  

Well strike it all from your mind. 

This is not a story of Right concurring over Wrong. The good guy does not beat the bad man to a bloody pulp. This is not a tale of true love triumphing over all with a happy ending on top.  

This is a story about a man.  

To the public at large he is a soft spoken young man who is shy but kind. 

To the darkness and slithering demons of the night he is the wicked and terrible satin that plagues the world.  

There is no internal struggle of whether he is good or bad. He knows who he is and he knows what he wants. There is no question of whether he will do what is right or wrong for he has chosen his fate and will never falter.  

There is only the question of at what point does the end no longer justify the means? 

Because Dorian Gates is not the 'Hero' of this story. 

He is the Villain. 

"If this is the world the gods have ordained me to live in, then I will never regret one moment within which I destroy it." 

 
*Warning: ManxMan if you do not like then do not read.

This line is so deep that I can already tell that the person who wrote this is very talented. Share your skills!!! I'm jealous
There's one thing that's bugging me, please don't be upset. The first letter of the first word of a title is ALWAYS capital, no matter the word
First sentence is a bit cliche but it gets better. Cliche is gone.
LafeMD LafeMD Mar 26
It's very good so far. Has a strong message, and seems to flow well for the most part. The pacing is bit fast for my taste, and your world building could probably use some help but that's all relative.
                              
                              Overall, I like it and am going to keep reading. Lucian is already a great character. I like him.
Really? Nine is a young age, I'm fairly certain that the maximum is more than mine. 
                              Seriously. Shouldn't it be around 17?
We can't fault what Lucian said because it's true.
                              Especially if/when they counterattack this defining truth with "Not everyone can be saved" or something like that.