Kelly Hollerman goes to visit he family friends in Romania and soo finds out they are vampires. Kevin refuses to understand why kelly is so upset.
In Romanian they have no k's so you could have used a c just saying ! poveste frumoasă, deși !
I`m from Romania. You know. You could choose Romanian names ^^
@Orville Thank you!!! I do know! I love advice~~~!! :) i started editing it~~ and i know theres even move work to be done~~ I'm getting better~~ This was one of my first stories on here~ Some of my newer ones i've been adding much more detail~~ Thank you again!
I like how its a little different from most vampire stories. There were a few spelling mistakes here and there but other then that it was a pretty good read!
i think dreamybanana is right. exactly right. you do lose your reader in first sentence, they will still read it, but its not as interesting as it could be.
@dreamybanana ok thank you i will re write it i think but not right away =)