My visit to Romania.......... Includes vampires?

My visit to Romania.......... Includes vampires?

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Jess By MusicLoverSWS Completed

Kelly Hollerman goes to visit he family friends in Romania and soo finds out they are vampires. Kevin refuses to understand why kelly is so upset.

RebeccaKellerBodnar RebeccaKellerBodnar Sep 28, 2014
In Romanian they have no k's so you could have used a c just saying ! poveste frumoasă, deși !
LikeMyLavaCake LikeMyLavaCake Apr 25, 2013
I`m from Romania. You know. You could choose Romanian names ^^
MusicLoverSWS MusicLoverSWS Apr 11, 2011
@Orville Thank you!!! I do know! I love advice~~~!! :) i started editing it~~ and i know theres even move work to be done~~ I'm getting better~~ This was one of my first stories on here~ Some of my newer ones i've been adding much more detail~~ Thank you again!
                              
eyeofthebeholder eyeofthebeholder Nov 02, 2010
I like how its a little different from most vampire stories. There were a few spelling mistakes here and there but other then that it was a pretty good read!
FrozenHearts FrozenHearts Oct 30, 2010
i think dreamybanana is right. exactly right. you do lose your reader in first sentence, they will still read it, but its not as interesting as it could be.
MusicLoverSWS MusicLoverSWS Aug 18, 2010
@dreamybanana  ok thank you i will re write it i think but not right away =)