Seasons of Ferne, Summer's Passion

Seasons of Ferne, Summer's Passion

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mike_yeaton By mike_yeaton Completed

Abandoned on the steps of a church as an infant, Evelyn Ferne finally feels as though her life is coming together. At long last she has the parents she's always longed for, as well as her first taste of real romance and love. But try as she might her life has never been normal. Abilities to which she has little control and even less understanding have always threatened to derail the life Evelyn worked so hard to build. Abilities that are steadily growing in strength and diversity. 

And now Evelyn's tenuous hold on life has been threatened further still. A friend, once thought imaginary, has made a very sudden, very real re-appearance, bringing to life secrets and dangers from a past and a world Evelyn never knew existed. A world that wants nothing more than to tear everything she loves apart.

Will Evelyn be able to hold onto the life she's always wanted and protect those she loves, or will the unknown darkness from her hidden past claim her for its own.

JCKang JCKang Feb 07
This story seems to be of a hero raised by strangers. Looks promising.  I was intrigued by the use of magic, as well as why this child was so important
Sarel303 Sarel303 Apr 23
A fantastic opening. It really leaves the reader wondering, 'who is this child?' Hamnet is a great character. I hope we meet him again.
JenniMRose JenniMRose Feb 21
I got a little tripped up here. Going with the flow of your story, my mind automatically wanted to add a period after "allow" and begin a new sentence. Possibly rewording it might make the sentence a bit less choppy and carry on the easy flow you've already created.
JCKang JCKang Feb 07
So if that's the case, wouldn't the mechanicals be better off with the baby dead?
JCKang JCKang Feb 07
Instead of using a said-ism, I think you can turn this into a dialog beat and convey the threat.
JCKang JCKang Feb 07
This is cool!   Though I think you could delete "like grasping tentacles," because I think we can picture it from the first part of the sentence