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Jordan By TheUltimateFatMan Completed

Dedicated to A Promising Young Poet: TwistedInsomniac

A/N: There is no right way to interpret poetry. Just find a way to connect to it. What does it say to you? Poetry Is a connection to emotion. 


Stripped of pain, no more fear

Guide my soul, beauty I revere

Love myself, now or never

Guide my heart, don't let it tether


Darkness cannot hide the symmetry of light

Lonely and sullen, but full of fight

Stripped down and bearing my fears

Open to detriment and void my tears


Suddenly free

Was it meant to be?

Can it be real?

Can I still feel?


Beauty of mind and soul

Real emotion, harder toll

See the true, and see it here

Rip away expectation, cause love is near

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Merial671 Merial671 May 18, 2015 04:21AM
That was the most beautiful poem ever. I CANT BELIEVE ALL DA FEELZ
CraigDiuguid CraigDiuguid May 19, 2013 03:00AM
The thought is real. But, to plain, to rythumitic.
                              Bring something like; I saw faces, places, visions that begged, I dared to glance, it was to light, to much was exposed...
                              Please, don't get me wrong, you have talent but we ask need people to think, right? Peace.
I love it! It was written and styled beautifully and I understood. I understood everything. Job well done, Sir. Jolly good job well done.
savemark savemark Mar 03, 2013 04:14AM
This was exceptionally well-done. It isn't every day that you come across people who are passionate about good poetry. Key word being 'good,' because a lot of people can't even figure out what the hell an approximate rhyme or iambic pentameter is. Kudos to you- this was perfection.
@chloe42 nude as in exposed. in a way its a metaphor for me exposing my feelings and myself through this poem.
noauthor noauthor Jan 26, 2013 06:54PM
Nice imagery and great use of rhyme for a deep attachment to the poem.