Alone Rewrite

Alone Rewrite

176 Reads 3 Votes 1 Part Story
Pheoxy By Pheoxy Updated Aug 03, 2010

I've walked on this earth so long I have forgotten how to feel,
How to reach out to someone,
My heart is Frozen to the core,
But I can see that I'm just around the corner again,
To feel the first rays of feeling caress the surface of my heart,
Long have I waited,
And longer still do I wait,
As the first rays hit,
I smile once more,
Till the ice comes once more.

Don't ask, I really suck at this stuff.

AE_KIrk AE_KIrk Aug 03, 2010
Oo very gripping! Mind some of your words though, the first sentence it's sped not speed lol. Also ensure that you break it up. I can see the paragraphs but it's still a big huge chunk of text.
                              
                              Abi
Pheoxy Pheoxy Aug 03, 2010
Note the Video, I thought the AMV suited it well. Apart from a few things I have yet to correct some mistakes in the above story.