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Amiss [Spoonful of Madness #2] ✔

Amiss [Spoonful of Madness #2] ✔

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Salima (inactive due to exams!) By blackrosedrop Completed

After evading her inner demons, Ashley Clarke finds herself trapped within the walls of the Order, her dangerous powers the only reason she is still alive. In the midst of a Rogue uprising, there's a new player on the field, another Unrated, searching for a deadly weapon that could destroy the world. Alongside Kasper and other agents, Ashley must stop the new threat and find the weapon before it's too late.

Dante_Greywolf Dante_Greywolf Dec 31, 2016
Remind me to read the first book as well so I know why she's there
pedolecki pedolecki Dec 29, 2016
These should still be periods I believe since the MC butts in and says some after this. I think the only time you put commas at the end of a sentence is if it was something like:
                              
                              "He stepped on my shoes," she said before whining.
                              
                              "They were brand new!"
VagrantDust VagrantDust Dec 31, 2016
Didn't she just name all the characters around her? Why is she not referring to this one by name?
pedolecki pedolecki Dec 29, 2016
Oh and since the character doesn't continue to talk. The comma at the end of the sentence should be a period.
pedolecki pedolecki Dec 29, 2016
You should probably edit this sentence. Its a fragment. There's no main clause.
Dante_Greywolf Dante_Greywolf Dec 31, 2016
Lol...Anyhow what would you expect. She has been in a coma for a a couple of months