Bit of Love

Bit of Love

24.1K Reads 649 Votes 18 Part Story
Fern By romione_weasley Updated Aug 16

Okay! This is my first time writing a fanfic so..yeah! I don't own any of the characters! The characters all belong to the wonderful queen J.K. Rowling! Okay..I'll stop blabbing now! Suggestions and comments are always appreciated! Enjoy <3

  • fanfiction
  • hermione
  • love
  • romione
  • ron
romione_weasley romione_weasley Jan 31, 2015
True but it's published already so..nothing I can do about it and thanks for the suggestion
DavidWhovian DavidWhovian Jan 31, 2015
So they were eating breakfast? Perhaps it would have been clearer if you had written "breakfast table"? Just a suggestion. Oh, also you once used quite when you meant quiet.
romione_weasley romione_weasley Jan 31, 2015
Ahah! Sorry but they were just taking a nap that's all and I didn't want to put the eating parts in the story..I know it's a bit confusing
DavidWhovian DavidWhovian Jan 31, 2015
I'm a little confused about the chronology. This chapter starts in the morning, right before breakfast, then snogging, then instead of eating breakfast, they are at the dinner table, then bed? Except Ron asked Hermione to dress up tonight, so why are they sleeping now?