The Devil's Daughter

The Devil's Daughter

92.3K Reads 4K Votes 28 Part Story
Ellie Donnelly By Froggie27 Updated Feb 27

Betrayal follows her, the Angels are against her, and the Devil is on her tail. As Lucifer's Daughter Abbegael must hide her identity from both Heaven and Hell if she is to survive. In the midst of the battle for her life, comes a battle for her heart as she starts to fall for the enemy at her side.

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Trapped within the fiery depths of Hell, her only chance of escape is him; a stranger, the enemy. 

"I'm not going to hurt you," he growls in my ear, "Neither am I going to hand you over to that Bastard." I flinch at the anger in his voice and confusion rushes through me.

"What?" I squeak, attempting to get air into my constricted lungs. He sighs, the warm air brushing against my neck, sending goose bumps skittering across my skin.

"I'm not going to tell him you intend to escape. How can I when I plan to do the same thing?" My mind whirls as I attempt to understand what he is saying. He wants to escape? But he is one of Lucifer's most trusted. How does that even happen? He's lying.

"I'm not lying. I needed him to trust me or I would never find a way to get out." 

"You know a way out? Wait. Did you just read my thoughts? How did you just read my thoughts? I thought you were a shield!" Once again his sigh of exasperation leaves goose bumps on my skin and a shiver running down my spine.

"I am a shield. It just so happens that I'm a reader too. Yes, that is possible. Obviously. Now can I let you go, or are you going to try and kill me again?"



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so, so good! you describe the world and their setting so vividly that it's easy for readers to follow along. it draws them in and it sounds very interesting! your writing is fantastic, but watch some of those misplaced semicolons! xx
FenrirXIX FenrirXIX Aug 25
I've read lots of books about angels and the devil but even though I'm only at the first chapter I know already this is my favorite.
ed2wfu ed2wfu Nov 20, 2015
I would like more, more! I'm only on the first part and I like it. First-rate writing. Adding this to my list for sure!
Lossofgravity Lossofgravity Nov 04, 2015
Amazing story. I'm am so intrigued, I can't stop reading it!
                              Few grammar mistakes, but over all it's really good!
Sayonara_A Sayonara_A Oct 18, 2015
I like the story and your descriptions. I'm interested in seeing about this characters past in Heaven and what other characters she'd come to meet. Nothing really to complain on. But I'm enjoying myself :3
AbiiTastic AbiiTastic Sep 20, 2015
I love this. I've only just read but you've managed to keep me intrigued. I wanna no more. 
                              
                              A few things to change just editing wise. A few missing grammar but heck I hardly noticed had to re read to find it. 
                              
                              I'm deffo adding to my list.