Buttercup Farm

Buttercup Farm

3.6K Reads 128 Votes 22 Part Story
Rachel Price By RachelsPeaches Completed

She frequently said such cruel things to me during daylight hours but when the moon danced in the night sky and all were asleep she called to me. Like a siren out at sea. It was during these twilight minutes she felt most alone, it was these seconds she could not bear her walls for company and it was these breathless and cold nights she wanted my body most.

The reader is instantly dropped into the flow of the time. The social interactions and the sensibilities. Perfect. :)
RachelsPeaches RachelsPeaches Sep 01, 2011
@idontneedanusername Ahaha not at all! :D Somebody has to do it otherwise my story will be full of little mistakes like them. Thank you so much :D
RachelsPeaches RachelsPeaches Aug 31, 2011
@idontneedanusername OK, thank you so much for your feedback :D Worth the wait ;)
                              P.S where abouts is that error?
idontneedanusername idontneedanusername Aug 30, 2011
Very nice prologue. It's something that will definitely drag a reader in. You were very descriptive without being a giveaway. Found some spelling errors like you spelled 'sweat' as 'sweet' but those are minor flaws which i'm sure you can fix with a bit of editing.
RachelsPeaches RachelsPeaches Jun 16, 2011
@ViAllie Okayy, thank you soo much! It means a lot to read someones honest opinion on it :D Thank you, I'll try and correct the spelling mistakes :D Thank Youuu :D
RachelsPeaches RachelsPeaches Jun 03, 2011
@No1SaidUHad2LikeIt Haha, yeahh... I'm not sure whether to be embarrased or proud about that :P But thanks for giving my story a shot, it means a lot. :D