Then they merge
Good start and good writing only a few errors N spelling and extra words. I will recommend this 2 all my authors 2 recommend 2 all their fans ect.
This is a good start! I've never read a mafia story before but i'm looking forward to it :)
keep going with it...i'm no expert on grammar and stuff but I am kinda an expert on imaginative stories...try to write down some points on what you want to happen becoz b4 u know it...u come to a point and ur like "shit! What am I gonna write now"
It's a really good start! I voted too, and will keep reading.
no problem your so big and famous now congrats
This is a really cool story!!! I love it and can't wait to read more!!