When Love Walked In

When Love Walked In

8.9K Reads 439 Votes 41 Part Story
Amanee By MyJewel12 Updated Dec 01

Imagine having to go through something so horrifying that no one thought could ever be the same and then someone comes along to prove them wrong. For Amber, having Damien Beliena walk into her life was something she would have never thought could happen. But she never would have imagined having her first love happen so fast either. An emotionally revved up roller coaster ride that is filled with love, betrayal, acceptance, friendship and anything else in this not so ordinary teenage girl's life that could go in any direction as she discovers that not one thing alone can define you nor should you let it.


Just a little shoutout out to @consciousdreamer1 for the gorgeous cover. I love youuuuuu. Go check out her books they are awesome! (Not to mention her covers )




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Excerpt 


"I'm sorry I was born. I'm sorry that you have to love someone like me."


"Don't say that," he said. "You shouldn't be sorry for any of those things because you're not a monster. You're not worthless. You're so much more." 

"If you say you're sorry, you're apologizing for yourself being brought into this world. I would get down on my knees and say thank you. Thank you for bringing Amber into my life. I love you, and that's something I will never apologize for."

I love this set up- girl who feels invisible in some ways, intriguing boy at school, something horrible in past, and sophistication of home life and good parents! Beautiful writing, and very unlike your typical YA story :)
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Abby_Hope Abby_Hope Jul 06, 2014
You started the chapter with too many I's but it wasn't a bad chapter
Ysa_Arcangel Ysa_Arcangel Jan 07, 2014
Glad that's her parent value her more than anything. Oh, what about that past? Glad you reveal something to us as the story goes along. The word 'papa' seems overuse, you may consider other pronouns dear.
Ysa_Arcangel Ysa_Arcangel Jan 07, 2014
RRG: 
                              This was quite an interesting start :-) I'm loving how you don't overfill it with detail and too much flowery language, just enough to set the scene and make your readers want to read more. When your crush bumped on you it's surreal that you froze and just stare.
AYClaudy AYClaudy Dec 23, 2013
So far it seems like her family is pretty cool, although I can tell how her dad might get preoccupied with work. I am also glad to see she has a good friend in Victoria. And Im really interested in her past now. Another good chapter!