Coated (ON HOLD)

Coated (ON HOLD)

2.1K Reads 201 Votes 6 Part Story
ᔕᗩᖇᗩ By blacklovespurple Updated Aug 12, 2013

17 year old Kelly Dunn got dumped by her boyfriend Jake.After a mere 2 weeks Jake started dating Lynn,which leaves Kelly devastated..It didn't help that Kelly  and her mother never get along ,and are always in continuous conflicts.But when Kelly meets Dylan her life completely changes and then leaves her in a huge dilemma between family,friends and love.

"This beautiful cover photo was taken by Alexander Duvall"

    WriterNotAFighter WriterNotAFighter Jan 04, 2014
    I really like this so far. It's nowhere near being cliche for being a romance novel. It's very realistic. Readers look for that in writers. I also think that you made the chapter the perfect length too. Great job! Can't wait to read more.
    thatgirlnamedamy thatgirlnamedamy Jul 22, 2013
    I really like this, i might read more once it's completed :) The starting of the book grabs your attention too. Really epic :D
    TanviSharan TanviSharan Jul 01, 2013
    aww!!! that was sad!! pathetic cheater!!!! X( freaking bimbo!!! huh!! 
                                  love the start though!! good work! nice plot line! a few punctuation mistakes but very nice overall!
                                  
                                  
                                  would love to read more!
    knicole2004 knicole2004 Jun 30, 2013
    it sucks that a friend could do that to you.
                                  
                                  but, its a good start to the story, but several errors in punctuation. and there's not a lot of description in between dialogue, you have to make a connection with the reader. but the start was very good.
    xChibix xChibix Jun 26, 2013
    There's a lot of errors in here, particularly in the dialogue. The paragraphs seem too far spaced out. Other than that, it's interesting and portrays emotions well. :)
    SummertimeSadnessx SummertimeSadnessx Jun 22, 2013
    i really like your range of sentence starters and the opening line made me want to read on. your dialogue is interesting too. voted x