She was normal.
She kept her head down.
She was ignored.
She met the Marauders.
its really good and i think the story ahead would be real nice. continue writing and all the best!
If I'm completely honest with you, I was just going to scroll right past this story. I thought nothing of it. The I saw the description and I kinda just HAD to click Read. It was so vague but yet it was intriguing. So here I am. I hope this story will be as good as I'm hoping! :)
Does he actually think she had another kid? (if thats what he's thinking)
yay! it's really hard to find good hp fanfics and this is already a great one, I can feel it.
I've never seen Harry Potter, but I could envision this in my head. The story flows wonderfully, and your style of writing is really good! Good start!
This is really good! Your sentences flow smoothly. I got a sense of being like I felt like I was her, of how you describe the place. I never read or seen Harry Potter but this is really great