Dark Like Me (EDITING!!)

Dark Like Me (EDITING!!)

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Amaunet Jendayi By Autodidact90 Completed

Sirrah Winters is sixteen years old, old enough to know that she is different from her siblings with her dark skin.  She is old enough to understand what the strangers on the streets are whispering.  Old enough to know the meaning behind her "friend's" teasing.  Maybe that's why she begins sheltering herself, becoming more and more introverted.  She knows what people think when they see that her siblings are a different color than her.

NekoShiiro NekoShiiro Mar 22
'Kay, here we go! Just a thing: this is a kind of introduction, so I'd personally separate it from the rest of the chapter, maybe put it as a prologue or a foreword. This last sentence would be much more impressive and effective that way, in my oppinion.
NekoShiiro NekoShiiro Mar 22
Hell, someone's being insulted in your restaurant, DO SOMETHINGa
It sounded better with this since it seems no one adopted her because she was dark skinned
I would have been like you must have escaped idiot island but that's not my  Business ☕️
This reminds me of a movie that I saw. One where the main protagonist is a British black woman adopted by wealth and respected white British family has to struggle to be accepted by those around her.
sahenley sahenley Apr 18
Sad chapter. I think you could really use your first sentence or two as an opportunity to be more descriptive. Example: I was standing on the sidewalk of the 1st Street McDonald's .