The Vikings Payment

The Vikings Payment

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War-Goddess-Kulunaya By War_Goddess_Nae Updated May 09, 2016

I was no longer safe in my own I no longer have a home, I am nothing but payment to these monster to protect my old home.

I will never give him my heart I will lock it up and let it die before I give it away.

    So you still haven't shown us if she's fierce or timid and dainty.  Still confusing.
    You should of used commas to show you were introducing names of characters into the story.  Makes it confusing,  I assumed at first that you were using a language that made no sense.
    If it's her birthday, as the date above then there is a flaw.
    chimoppa chimoppa Jun 10, 2016
    I do not know how people find this offensive...its all in the way you interpret it.
    WhatisWithin WhatisWithin Jun 08, 2016
    I like this a lot, but I do think that you should read this out loud. It helps you catch mistakes better.
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    ShaylaHotchkiss ShaylaHotchkiss Apr 21, 2016
    I love this as it is sentimental but they would not have celebrated birthdays as we do, most times they wouldn't mark the date, just the year as the infant mortality rate for that time period is very high