HOW COULD HE FALL IN LOVE WITH A STRIPPER LIKE ME!!!!!!

HOW COULD HE FALL IN LOVE WITH A STRIPPER LIKE ME!!!!!!

52.6K Reads 249 Votes 11 Part Story
aubrey By twigirl14 Updated Aug 16, 2014

STRIPPER,LOVE,BABY

DonutThinkSo DonutThinkSo Feb 11, 2015
@change_your_ticket do u happen to own the account change your ticket on instagram?
DonutThinkSo DonutThinkSo Feb 10, 2015
there is slight improvement from chapter 1... lunch talk is kinda boring so spice it up with maybe someone you don't like comes to your table, etc.
Bjtch-da-nite Bjtch-da-nite Dec 22, 2013
sorry to say but really predictable and a lot of spelling errors
comeandfiguremeout comeandfiguremeout Mar 03, 2013
Quite cliche and quite a lot mistakes. Maybe edit it and see if you can through in an element of surprise or mystery? It also seems rushed:) please don't be offended.
SonicGherkin SonicGherkin Jan 28, 2012
Nice idea, but so far cliche. Find a way to make it really unique and out of the ordinary.
jamilla_ jamilla_ Jan 25, 2011
um.... capitalize, put dialogues in a new line, try not to rush the sequence of events and describe more..... lol if i sound mean.... sry.... but you do have a interesting plot going on tho :)