A Secretary VS A Vice President

A Secretary VS A Vice President

5.2K Reads 84 Votes 22 Part Story
rikako "no chill" aida By cresixan Completed

Haha wag niyo nang basahin 'toh, maiirita lang kayo.


Credits to @OkayFineWhatever for the cover

  • fanficfriday
  • leo
  • past
  • school
  • secretary
  • seric
  • valentines
  • vicepresident
seasthemoment seasthemoment Jun 01, 2016
Book is fairly good, but I recommend not putting too many lyrics in the chapter, it distracts the reader and can cause them to lose interest. Also you should include some dialogue to spice up your story, and slow down the time a bit :) Great story, keep going
EllenFairyBlue4 EllenFairyBlue4 Feb 14, 2015
For this chapter. I suggest imagining the scene in your head of the trio at the beach and writing what you see, hear, feel, smell from the image in your head to show readers why this part is important to your story. Too much telling, need to show.
EllenFairyBlue4 EllenFairyBlue4 Feb 14, 2015
Alright, so my first opinion of this story is that you tell to much. You need to show, not tell.