It does have a lot of sex in it so be warned. I am also horrible at definitions.
Now where the hell is zetsu’s pants? I saw no sentence with pant removal!
I am not trying to be mean, your a great. Writer, but I believe you need to have a plot or need to extend it out more, other than that , it is perfect, remember I'm not trying to be mean, but it's just an opinion
Me: Where is this wall that you speak of? I thought we were in a garden!
Natsuki: uh, there’s probably a building or something but that is a pretty ironically placed wall.
I LOVED IT!
I love akatsuki lemons and yours are unique and.... AWESOM!
This has no grammar whatsoever, and what happened to the punctuation??
I am silently judging you. Grammar. Lack of quotations(" ") and use of tilde(~) in their place. Please, for the sake of the lemon world. Fix this.