Percy is betrayed by the ones he loves most... Annabeth but what will happen when Artemis explains her true feelings to percy and percy confesses his true feelings to her
Warnig pertamis involved
God of models like what type of model? The hot human cloth models? The models used in science
Your not giving yourself the opportunity to describe the setting and the places he goes to. Punctuation and dialogue isn't being used correctly.
Models, why, just, nope won't ask I'll be over there on the other side of the exit...
Hahahahah models this is going way too fast, and he has way to many domains....yeah....way too fast
You should've had the pain bigger. the heart wrenching moments when he found out. the pain he felt, the betrayal, the loneliness he experienced.
Story line sounds good,but you might want to work on your punctuations.