Born to Run

Born to Run

27 Part Story 12.8K Reads 186 Votes
Jo By VividlyInspired Completed

A Queen with an heir. A King left to grieve. A girl who knows only how to flee.

GraceKnight5 GraceKnight5 Sep 26, 2012 10:17AM
@VividlyInspired So long as you never stopped writing, it should have. "We are all apprentices in a profession in which no one becomes a master."
@GraceKnight5 thanks for the tip! haha, I'm hoping that my writing is better than this now, I wrote this when I was 15!
GraceKnight5 GraceKnight5 Sep 26, 2012 12:24AM
Ahh! The adverbs! You need to do some serious chopping. For the first line, you could replace "he said charmingly" with "he said with a charming smile." Same meaning, but more elegant and far less choppy.
I have finishing reading this book and I loved...it really good
@Dirtydianaxxxxx Awesome!! This is the only novel that I have completed, so read up! ;) 
                              
                              @latsat Thank YOU for reading it! I hope you like how it develops :)
@StarlightInspiration This is true! I'm so good at plotting :P