Do you love me Daddy?

Do you love me Daddy?

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Miranda Love By XlarrystylinX Completed

"Daddy do you love me?" Louis asked cuddled up to his daddy, who was caressing Louis' brown feathered hair. Harry smiled and kissed Louis' forehead, "always and forever baby,"

Also (constructive criticism), maybe try mixing things up a bit. Starting almost every sentence with 'he' gets quite repetitive. I used to do this with my writing also, until I got told this, so no big deal (:
XlarrystylinX XlarrystylinX Oct 14, 2016
I just picked a random disney character. I forgot Liam was into toy Story
Writersdrug Writersdrug Jan 28, 2015
You should try spacing the paragraphs more, not make into one gigantic mess
XlarrystylinX XlarrystylinX Nov 20, 2014
@Elinaaaah lol well im glad its my story! Yeah i hope this story turns out good too! if you have any ideas for the story, you can gladly let me know! open to ideas!
Elinaaaah Elinaaaah Nov 20, 2014
First one to like and comment. I'm so cool. But I hope this story turns out good xx