Hush Money is the first story in a series I'm working on called the Talent Chronicles. The series is about people who have supernatural abilities and how their lives are affected by them. This story is about a teenage girl named Joss, for whom hiding her ability has been the most important thing in her life, and that's really impacted the person she's become. ETA: This story has since been completed and published. Follow the link in my profile to my website for retailer links.
Hmmm............you are building up the story here.............going quite well. I have a few suggestions- First, stop using /...../ to project emphasis. Use "....." instead or leave it like that or maybe write in italics. Second, since you are not writing something pacy at the moment, you could develop the characters.........get in some descriptions. I hope these help your story. Cheers !!!  ;-))