Used and abused

Used and abused

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ceryswilson1998 By ceryswilson1998 Updated Jul 22

18 year old Zoe finds herself kidnapped and used by the famous luke hemmings who uses her as a sex slave

Why is she so calm about this? Is she not wondering why she's tied to a bed?
Smooth..... wtf hahaa i would have started to ramble about when i pictured this moment it my head or just stared at him
To many ands in this paragraph. Use periods or commas to sperate and distinguish the sentences.. (friendly criticism )
Again really trying to be constructive I feel like all your doing is stating like your summarizing I think you adding some real dialogue from her and him you pull the reader in even faster  ( great work by the way )😁😁😁
charmingharreh charmingharreh Nov 21, 2016
HOW DID WE END UP TALKING IN THE FIRST PLACE YOU SAID YOU LIKE MY COBAIN SHIRT NOW WERE WALKING BACK TO YOUR PLACE
i would of cried and tried to punch him....im sorry luke..i love u