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The Mysterious Biker Girl

The Mysterious Biker Girl

97.3K Reads 2.6K Votes 36 Part Story
Ninja By XxCreativityxX Completed

©.West Haven College is the school that all the children of West Haven go to after their primary and secondary education, the college is well know for its good behaviour, attendance and not to mention their academic achievements. 
As usual the parking lots of the school was peaceful and quiet, until a rev of a motorbike was heard all the students gasped as they saw the shiny black and pink bike being driven by a person in a full leather outfit, their face was blocked by the black tinted helmet. The leather outfit pointed out that this particular biker was a girl as the outfit hugged her in all the right places indicating all of her womanly features.
Just who is this mysterious biker girl? ©

YoursTrulyMaryZ YoursTrulyMaryZ Jun 16, 2016
Living for this book so far, but it could be a bit more easier on the eye if periods were used to end a sentence. It's still enjoyable, but a bit confusing with the long run-on sentences.  Sorry if this seems offensive in any way.  Just trying to help.
That is a lot of A's lol, I had to read it a few times to get the names straight 😂😆😂😂😆😆
This has gotta be the longest sentence I've ever seen, but love your writing so far! 😊
_that_1_girl _that_1_girl Sep 05, 2015
You have a lot of run on sentences. I could type out this whole long sentence, and make it a paragraph, but I feel like if you go back, take out some of those commas, and put a few periods, you would be good.