This definitely got my attention! I am for sure going to keep reading!
jey i'm reading it it seems really good x its really fab so far x
You asked me to read it so I am! And it's pretty good so far!
Love it,very descripted,just the way i like stories LOL.Thanx for telling me about your story =)
You asked if I would read this and I did. I love it! I have a image of the. Beach in the story now! It is great. If anyone asks me to read something I will I'm not gonna say. Anything. Rude about your story cause I love it.
Awesome story! I've voted! I love how your sentences flow and keep the reader hooked. Great descriptions. Though, like you said at the beginning, you do have a few grammer issues.