Station Five

Station Five

4 Part Story 1.5K Reads 75 Votes
D. L. Mackenzie By dlmackenzie Updated Jul 18, 2013

Mia Cordova is a nurse's aide at Los Arcos Care Center, a large skilled nursing facility caring for the profoundly disabled.  Abby Tate, Mia's twenty-one-year-old patient, has been in a coma for almost two years, kept alive on a ventilator.  When Abby unexpectedly wakes up to find herself a quadriplegic, she withdraws into her own inexpressible feelings of grief, loss, and fear.  As her memories return, it seems Abby is somehow unconsciously channeling some dark and vengeful power, a malevolent force that threatens to destroy everyone and everything around her.

Kittkitt Kittkitt Jul 21, 2013 02:26PM
Absolutely excellent writing , got me wondering what happens next
NormanForrest NormanForrest Jul 15, 2013 08:56AM
@dlmackenzie Yes the extra depth is great and the fine line is excellent. Thanks.   vtd
NormanForrest NormanForrest Jul 10, 2013 12:07PM
@dlmackenzie I like the extra depth. The doc is more repulsive, Pat harder to like and Mia easier to sympathise with.   vtd
dlmackenzie dlmackenzie May 15, 2013 10:22PM
@granny2k @NormanForrest I've been working on another project and haven't had the time to return to this story.  Now I'm dithering over whether to dial back the paranormal and make it a bit more psychological.  Might take a while to get back into this.
dlmackenzie dlmackenzie Nov 26, 2012 05:28PM
Haha, I already changed it to "eyeing," although I'm considering spelling it "observing," or perhaps changing the narrative to include blind cats. ;-)
adf85053 adf85053 Nov 25, 2012 09:25PM
@dlmackenzie Now I'm glad I put the question mark after "Isn't it 'eyeing'?"  Especially since you so cruelly subjected me to the didtionary forum link with its 16 awesomely vapid comments about which spelling is "correct.".
                              
                              Properly abashed, I now feverishly campaign for "eying."