dreams

dreams

9.8K Reads 17 Votes 13 Part Story
Coco By zay-starh Completed

about a very young girl who starts mother hood way to young and doesnt know what real love is she has big dreams for her self and family but will they ever come true or will life carry on to be a drag of hard time......NOT A SKET STORY!!!

cheyannentangu cheyannentangu Jan 10, 2011
This good!!  but why do you keep changing her age? Started of being a 11 yr old mum to 13 then it was her 15 birthday and it says she's 14? It's confusing but it's still gudd story :)
MarylandReader3 MarylandReader3 Oct 17, 2010
She was 11 at dee tym she got pregnant?
                              
                              Ur messed up , I LOVE THE STORY :)
jamaica-first jamaica-first Jul 19, 2010
Your writing style is very visual, gets you straight into the characters,  however, your choice of language  is colourfull to say the least but fits the story you are trying to portray.
                              
msfashion577 msfashion577 Jul 12, 2010
I don't really understand the words can u start puttin quotes on wat ppl r sayin
zay-starh zay-starh Jul 09, 2010
read my other stories after this one there much clearer and much better in discription :)
FallOutGirl FallOutGirl Jul 09, 2010
For page three I don't know whostslking and or saying what it's kind of confusing