THIS IS A LEMON STORY (JUST MAKING THAT CLEAR), anyway my friend was had the idea of the story. She just told me to write it and post it up on here. LOL
I don't understand. If this story is with your own character you should put it into a proper 3rd person prospective. It gets really weird when you put you even thou it your character, it mostly sounds like a reader book if you use "you" .
I AM NOT OKEY WITH THIS.ITS TO MUCH PERFECTION IN ONE PLACE.I AM CRYING AND LAUGHING AND SCREAMING AT SAME TIME ~(*+﹏+*)~ *NOSEBLEED*
Why did you put it in second person, but put your name instead of the readers name when you are putting it in 2nd person view? You either do it 3rd or 1st person when you are going to yourself.