Welcome to the world of Kaylen. Filled with Drama. Never ending drama. Will it ever really stop? Who knows. (This story is now in the middle of editing, so please stand by (: )
Lots of spelling errors. I didnt see the point of describing every new character's hair color... it needs more work
Honestly, there is so much unneeded description and spelling errors that I can barely read it. And so far I'm not sensing an issue, which is needed for a climax and resolution. No offense but it sounds like an 8-year-old is writing this.
I love it.. May I edit it.. or send in my corrections to improve the word usage!
lolll love the little sister and her barbie dolls
that was cute hahaha
but yeahh, this is def better than the last chapter :P
just watch out for spelling mistakes and hold back on descriptions.
and garretts a bitch, i liek shawn mroe :) LOL
It has a good plot but its really difficult to tell since there are a lot of spelling mistakes and some paragraphs are just ginormous blocks. And when there's dialogue the "" things get me confused cause I have no idea what and who's supposed to be talking.....
Hey so i got the message you left me to read your story and im glad i did. thanks for letting me know, im always down for reading another story lol. I like where its going, but like everyone else said on here, you should try to fix the spelling and grammer, other then that its really good. <3