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Pen Your Pride
The Lost Elements

The Lost Elements

71.4K Reads 4.5K Votes 47 Part Story
Phoebe1877 By Phoebe1877 Completed

This is the first real story I've written so please leave any and all criticism or suggestions about the story! Thanks for reading!

(Under Major Editing)

  • action
  • elements
  • hosts
  • monsters
  • portals
I like how the special girl isn't all pretty and everything...makes everything so much more real.
DreamsoftheSea2002 DreamsoftheSea2002 Jul 22, 2017
Found this beauty whilst exploring uncharted waters. In other words I finally went past the first 5 lines in my library for the first time in months
anesjke anesjke Apr 08, 2017
I just realised this is called The 'Lost' Elements.  Not The 'Last' Elements
deepsealife deepsealife Apr 10, 2016
The sentence formation here is jumbled up.  When you say,  'I  can't. ... much less....', you mention the easier task first.  I can't hold a pen,  much less write a story. 
                              It is to imply that he is too tired to do much as walk,  forget dealing with an attack.
Phoebe1877 Phoebe1877 Apr 10, 2016
Thanks for pointing that out! I probably never would have noticed that on my own!
Leenie_been Leenie_been Sep 20, 2014
It was wonderful because you are literally the greatest writer in the whole entire world!!!!!