SunDown

SunDown

24.5K Reads 232 Votes 13 Part Story
Michaylalove By Michaylalove Updated Jun 20, 2011

Bella has been running ever since she escaped and found Ron. Now they are moving back to Forks, but when they get back a certain familiar family is already there. Jasper and Alice seem to have already met Bella, but how? Ron seems to think that he knows everything about Bella, but he's in for a surprise. It seems that everyone has secrets in this little town.

Nuttybio Nuttybio Feb 06, 2011
Ooooooo, i really like it. *fans you* *-* its nice please write more :D just try adding some more dteails Overall its nice
                              
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purplegirl14 purplegirl14 Feb 06, 2011
The plot is greatbut you should edit. Look at puntuations(comas and quotations mostly) and I suggest writing out 'you'. It looks  a lot better than 'u' and sone people will even stop reading because of text talk. So those are some things you could work on. Good job!
purplegirl14 purplegirl14 Feb 06, 2011
Good start. Maybe add some more details and vary your word choice? Just making suggestions :)
Michaylalove Michaylalove Dec 29, 2010
Thanks for Commenting I guess? Even though you were advertising your own story? lol