Ash wings

Ash wings

1.9K Reads 22 Votes 8 Part Story
Dana By animebutterfly Updated Jun 23, 2011

Katie is sweet and smart while Ember mean and a fighting meachieen. What do these girls have in common nothing right? Wrong. Katie and Ember are the same person split into two. And things are about to get a lot worse.

HolzDolz HolzDolz Jun 17, 2010
It's sooooooo short, and you NEED speechmarks! Otherwise it's pants, however the idea is good.
HolzDolz HolzDolz Jun 17, 2010
@mangaBfan 
                              
                              Yeah I totally agree, plus it needs to be longer than that, it has really good potential, you just need to tweak it :)
mangaBfan mangaBfan Jun 11, 2010
i like it, its a good start! 
                              
                              1 thing i think u should go slow abit cuz its all happening too quick, ur paragraph needs to be sorted too. am not tring to sound mean or anything - i means its so good for a first story but i kno u could do much better!
                              keep it up! voted!
toriandeme toriandeme Mar 15, 2010
FREAKEN AMAZING. eme loves u.
                              and i love you. and everyone loves you. and
                              ur story is cool. like me.