5 Part Story 1.2K Reads 12 Votes
Natassja Eternal By NatassjaEternal Updated 4 years ago
Earth, post alien invasion. Our own technologies allowed them to come and enslave the human population. To what end?
A good premise and some decent writing here, but needs a little more editing, in my opinion. It's good to give a little more depth to the main character, even this early, so we care about the pain he experiences.
The beginning of your chapter seems a little choppy, try making it flow better; maybe read it aloud to yourself. Anyway, your story sounds really creative, keep it up!
wow, this is really good! it's going straight to my library! =)
I'm loving it so far....oh my gosh I love alien invasions...... =)