Into

Into

5 Part Story 1.2K Reads 12 Votes
Natassja Eternal By NatassjaEternal Updated Apr 30, 2011

Earth, post alien invasion. Our own technologies allowed them to come and enslave the human population. To what end?

astonwest astonwest May 08, 2011 09:53PM
A good premise and some decent writing here, but needs a little more editing, in my opinion. It's good to give a little more depth to the main character, even this early, so we care about the pain he experiences.
Lovable_El Lovable_El May 04, 2011 05:35AM
The beginning of your chapter seems a little choppy, try making it flow better; maybe read it aloud to yourself. Anyway, your story sounds really creative, keep it up!
marsbars marsbars May 03, 2011 06:59PM
wow, this is really good! it's going straight to my library! =)
marsbars marsbars May 03, 2011 06:44PM
I'm loving it so far....oh my gosh I love alien invasions...... =)