THE ONE YOU REJECTED IS REJECTING YOU (under construction)

THE ONE YOU REJECTED IS REJECTING YOU (under construction)

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BEATRICE POV







"Triss get your pathetic but down here and start making breakfeast for  the pack!" my older brother Jacob yelled. Let me introduce myself. My name is Beatrice Rose but i go by Triss. I am a werewolf and the omega of the Blood Moon Pack. I am bascially the slave of this pack. My own fudgin faimly orders me around like im a maid. I got used to it and just quietly did my work and cried when no one was around. Anyway today is my birthday and i turn 16. Yay right wrong today is the that no one remembers the day of my birth not even my faimly. I get out of the bed get dressed and go make the pack breakfeast after i finish i grab my skate board and ride to school.

                                                                                         

                                                                                      *AT SCHOOL*





"Hey watch where your going fatty!" the school and pack slut Jessica says when i bump into her on acciedent. I just men...

  • conflict
  • mates
  • powers
  • rejection
  • romance
nyasiahyman nyasiahyman Jun 18
I would have accept the rejection then left because if you don't accept the rejection then you still have a small weak bond
The fifth word in this paragraph is supposed to be butt not but. Butt means ass, but is used to introduce something contrasting with what has already been mentioned.
Honestly if I got rejected I would accept it run away become a part of another pack and train for YEARS then go back and beat that guys sorry a$$ then I would travel looking for my second chance mate
There is a double space between the for and pack, the 12th and 13th word
The I is not capitalized, 29th word. Also, when you said “Let me introduce myself.” You put a period instead of a comma, using the comma for something like that is correct grammar.
Sorry, but you really need to edit your book. You’re probably very young but you should try to find someone to edit your stories for you.