Rejected by my best friend ....

Rejected by my best friend ....

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Ellesse By ellesse100 Updated Jun 01, 2015

Lilly was rejected by her mate whom also happens to be her best friend Damien. Her whole family hatebher accept for her father the alpha of the Silver Night pack and the rest of her pack tread her as a puching bag and a slave. Her best friend and mate Damien rejects her so she runs away and joins a pack named Midnight Moon the stronget pack in America. What will happen when Lilly returns home 3 years later ?
Lilly isn't the same girl she was back then, now she is the worlds rarest and most powerful wolf alive . 

Will be completed once all the editing has been done 
edited by bruhitsgrayson

Tabiscuit Tabiscuit Jan 12
This is good, also, just to make this seem longer than it is, space this whole  paragraph into multiple paragraphs or sentences. That will make it easier for you to edit and type and for others with bad eyes (*cough* me *cough*) to read.
Tabiscuit Tabiscuit Jan 12
I think you need two editors because you have loads of run on sentences and you are missing lots of commas.
LeapingSpiritWolf LeapingSpiritWolf Jul 29, 2015
I need the curse words or else i dont know what you are sayin
TheresaPham1 TheresaPham1 Apr 16, 2014
You got some incorrect spelling, some bad grammar, and not a lot of puncerations, but other than that this story is amazing :-)
                              I love it ! Keep up the good work :]
Bookworm123 Bookworm123 Feb 26, 2013
Really good story but I think you need to edit and take care of grammar mistakes as your story seems to be less sophisticated in that manner but your plot is amazing also perhaps edit your blurb as it also has grammar errors