Druids Over Sohon

Druids Over Sohon

581 Reads 78 Votes 3 Part Story
MindBreach By MindBreach Updated Sep 21, 2012

Xavier, a 17 year old teen must face the daunting task of saving the human race from a druid overrun, using powers gifted to him unknowingly, he alone holds the secret to lead his people to salvation. For the race of mankind to continue, he must not fail them. Can one boy prevail in such dark hours?

zebralou zebralou Sep 29, 2012
I like the concept; it's very unique! :) Though I do see a few errors here and there--you could use some semicolons instead of commas (commas do not equal semicolons! XD). All it needs is to be polished just a bit, and I'm sure you'd be good to go! :D
annastasiaadams annastasiaadams Sep 23, 2012
This is sooo well written! I'm amazed!
                              Nice way to end the chapter too.
                              Not much of a action person but this sounds intriguing and i'm sure many people will love this- not that i didn't!
                              Well done! :)
De2ire De2ire Sep 22, 2012
I like it. You have great descriptions which allows me to imagine what is happening to your MC. The story also sooms really realistic and I definitley adore how you started your story by getting straight into the action. Great work! (:
RNMurray RNMurray Sep 22, 2012
Not bad, not bad at all. You dialogue seemed natural, and flowed with the overall tone off the story. Your descriptions were on point. Voted...Great read.
Navannah Navannah Sep 22, 2012
Massive details, it makes me feel like I'm there myself. An amazing job!
hearmeroar555 hearmeroar555 Sep 22, 2012
Very unique! I really like the concept, and how I can actually see it going somewhere. 
                              
                              I did find quite a few grammatical mistakes. If you revise (or get an editor) you should be able to find them. 
                              
                              Overall, it needs some polishing up, but it has great potential.