Lodestone Book One: The Sea of Storms

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Mark Whiteway By MarkWhiteway Completed
On the planet Kelanni, life is cheap. 
    
    With the aid of the fearsome "Keltar" enforcers in their flying cloaks, a ruthless invader is forcing the native people to mine the colloquially named "lodestone" - a substance from another universe with infinitely destructive power. 
    
    The only ones who can stop him are a tiny girl with fiery disposition, a former Keltar, a failed revolutionary, a musician and the mysterious creature, Boxx, who seems to speak only in riddles.
I'm torn on this. For one, there is an absolutely beautiful world -- lovingly crafted, and one that I can absolutely fall into. But at this point, I still fail to see two things and I am going to apologize in advance for being difficult: 1) I fail to see a character  I care about 2) I fail to see conflict. In the second chapter, that might be an issue.
                                    
                                    I will continue to keep reading only because the world is absolutely beautiful. Have you heard of a game called Albion? Your world reminds me so much of it. There is a world here. Give me characters and a story to care about, and I will gladly lose myself in it!
I'm torn on this. For one, there is an absolutely beautiful world -- lovingly crafted, and one that I can absolutely fall into. But at this point, I still fail to see two things and I am going to apologize in advance for being difficult: 1) I fail to see a character  I care about 2) I fail to see conflict. In the second chapter, that might be an issue.
                                    
                                    I will continue to keep reading only because the world is absolutely beautiful. Have you heard of a game called Albion? Your world reminds me so much of it. There is a world here. Give me characters and a story to care about, and I will gladly lose myself in it!
I'm torn on this. For one, there is an absolutely beautiful world -- lovingly crafted, and one that I can absolutely fall into. But at this point, I still fail to see two things and I am going to apologize in advance for being difficult: 1) I fail to see a character  I care about 2) I fail to see conflict. In the second chapter, that might be an issue.
                                    
                                    I will continue to keep reading only because the world is absolutely beautiful. Have you heard of a game called Albion? Your world reminds me so much of it. There is a world here. Give me characters and a story to care about, and I will gladly lose myself in it!
I'm torn on this. For one, there is an absolutely beautiful world -- lovingly crafted, and one that I can absolutely fall into. But at this point, I still fail to see two things and I am going to apologize in advance for being difficult: 1) I fail to see a character  I care about 2) I fail to see conflict. In the second chapter, that might be an issue.
                                    
                                    I will continue to keep reading only because the world is absolutely beautiful. Have you heard of a game called Albion? Your world reminds me so much of it. There is a world here. Give me characters and a story to care about, and I will gladly lose myself in it!
I'm torn on this. For one, there is an absolutely beautiful world -- lovingly crafted, and one that I can absolutely fall into. But at this point, I still fail to see two things and I am going to apologize in advance for being difficult: 1) I fail to see a character  I care about 2) I fail to see conflict. In the second chapter, that might be an issue.
                                    
                                    I will continue to keep reading only because the world is absolutely beautiful. Have you heard of a game called Albion? Your world reminds me so much of it. There is a world here. Give me characters and a story to care about, and I will gladly lose myself in it!
I'm torn on this. For one, there is an absolutely beautiful world -- lovingly crafted, and one that I can absolutely fall into. But at this point, I still fail to see two things and I am going to apologize in advance for being difficult: 1) I fail to see a character  I care about 2) I fail to see conflict. In the second chapter, that might be an issue.
                                    
                                    I will continue to keep reading only because the world is absolutely beautiful. Have you heard of a game called Albion? Your world reminds me so much of it. There is a world here. Give me characters and a story to care about, and I will gladly lose myself in it!