The Lady in Armour

20 Part Story 8.1K Reads 317 Votes
Yna By Damonh Updated 9 months ago
This is the story of Jo who dared to change everyone's destiny. With the help of some friends and the mystic fire dragon of north, Jo delved into the world of spirits, searched for solutions on how to end everyone's suffering. Come and see Jo's mischievous adventures and twisted love story.
That was a really interesting start. :) It sounds a little cliche, but we can already tell that there's a major twist in the story. :) I do suggest that you fix the gaps in between the kremp.
I love how you've written this :) Amazing descriptions and interesting dialogue! Great job. Voted
Excellent start. The relationship between the mother and son is quite unique. Your descriptions are done flawlesly and your character Liam seems realistic enough. My favourite would have to be the last line, somthing my own mother would say.
@Damoth What gave you inspiration to write this novel? It is very drawing! SEND IT TO A PUBLISHER! Xxxxxxxxxxxxxx
This is a very descriptive and deep story. It's really great! :)
Well written and very descriptive. This is so refreshing to read, I haven't seen no errors at all. So I voted. I like your writing style. 
                                    And what is the meaning of the word "Kremp"?