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13 Part Story 11.4K Reads 186 Votes
japred By japred Updated Sep 12, 2012

What is HORROR supposed to be?...is it for VENGEANCE or for SYMPATHY? 
    Twenty four students... Twenty four hours.... How many are willing to die for you? How many people are you willing to die for? Death is inevitable. Life is a choice. Make your decision.
    
    TWENTY FOUR!
    
    Storyline by: Japred Chiu  Edited by: Iveca Cale Ignacio and Japred Chiu Written by: Marianne Antoinette Suñe

wow....intense. I suggest you add just a teeny bit more detail and VOILA....PERFECT! so uhh yeah, i loved it tho! :)
japred japred Sep 27, 2012 12:40AM
@Darkened_Forests @CelticRose thank you for your comments. i'll fix this later.
japred japred Sep 25, 2012 01:20PM
@PoppingBubbles your comment is a proof on how effective the story is. thank you so much!
PoppingBubbles PoppingBubbles Sep 25, 2012 01:16PM
It's so fast paced and I'm actually kinda scared to read on, haha
XloverXD XloverXD Sep 24, 2012 11:55PM
It's a very nice story. I noticed a few sentence structure were off, maybe just look into rewording them differently. That's about it. I enjoyed the cliffhanger and how you left the reader intrigued and puzzled as to what exactly happened. Good job! :)
Anonymask Anonymask Sep 24, 2012 08:22PM
Ooo I like cliffhangers! Thanks for suggesting your story to me and sorry for taking so long to comment ! I'll be readiing more of this and I will also read the other of your stories you suggested to me after Ive read some other people's as well! :)