THAT first kiss.

THAT first kiss.

1K Reads 26 Votes 4 Part Story
Leah McMullan By Pinklemon Updated Apr 23, 2011

I lay there, looking up into the summer sun, watching the clouds go by, uncapable of moving. Then he leant over me, calling my name. His sandy hair dropped into his eyes, his soft, hazel eyes. Those lips that belonged to an angel, recalled my name. I tried to call back to him, let him know my feelings, but no words came out, just a triumphant breathe. He leaned closer and my heart felt like it was going to stop beating as he pressed his lips to mine.

  • accident
  • alex
  • ambulance
  • angel
  • better
  • bus
  • cakes
  • death
  • emergancy
  • first
  • flour
  • goodbye
  • hospital
  • kiss
  • life
  • like
  • love
  • over
  • run
  • stranger
  • summer
  • worse
Confiantexetxbelle Confiantexetxbelle Apr 07, 2011
good intro..moving into the next chap..Great work btw...voted
Shaowei0Love Shaowei0Love Apr 04, 2011
it's a good intro :) and as far as first kisses go, you did a pretty good job with describing one. although, "mint flooding my mouth" isn't something i, personally, would think about... still, pretty good :)
                              
                              -K
Springtime_Unicorn Springtime_Unicorn Apr 04, 2011
very nice as a hook. It really leaves a lot of questions that can only be answered by reading more...which I shall ... :)
TKAnez TKAnez Apr 04, 2011
This is very interesting and brings up a lot of questions that the reader will need to read on to find the answers. I like your writing style a lot. Good job~
ItsSima ItsSima Apr 04, 2011
really good prolougue ! makes the reader want to read more .. haha on to the next chapter.
                              
                              commented, voted - hope you do the same!
Bloodynewmoon Bloodynewmoon Apr 04, 2011
Huh, correct me if I'm wrong, but it sounds like he just gave her CPR. If I'm right, then it's not all that confusing. Then again confusing stuff makes people curious to want to know more. Very good.