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A Day at Grandma's

A Day at Grandma's

18.6K Reads 1.3K Votes 20 Part Story
EmilyHippich By EmilyHippich Updated Feb 11

Lauren and Joey are going to be spending the next week at their grandmother's house. They expect to have a normal week of baking cookies and playing board games, but this next week will be anything but normal.

JenniferEmbers JenniferEmbers Oct 13, 2016
I think this could be improved if you add paragraph breaks for dialogue. That's the standard and it helps the reader's eye move through the story with an easy flow.
JenniferEmbers JenniferEmbers Oct 13, 2016
@EmilyHippich You're  welcome. I really like your story, but the dialogue format was tripping me up. It's cool that the grandmother's house is like something from a different time :)
Emily great job on the story and you get a 100% A+ on it as well.
HelgaGuldHippich HelgaGuldHippich Jan 09, 2016
Great work Emily! Sounds like aunt Kirsten's house when she moved in!
LediaDarrow LediaDarrow Dec 28, 2015
OK waiting for the next chapter. And also waiting for the next chapter of kidnapped. Enjoy your writing.
LediaDarrow LediaDarrow Dec 27, 2015
Need to delete that comment. Sounds like Lauren may be more susceptible to ghostie then her brother.