Lauren and Joey are going to be spending the next week at their grandmother's house. They expect to have a normal week of baking cookies and playing board games, but this next week will be anything but normal.
I think this could be improved if you add paragraph breaks for dialogue. That's the standard and it helps the reader's eye move through the story with an easy flow.
@EmilyHippich You're welcome. I really like your story, but the dialogue format was tripping me up. It's cool that the grandmother's house is like something from a different time :)
Great work Emily! Sounds like aunt Kirsten's house when she moved in!
OK waiting for the next chapter. And also waiting for the next chapter of kidnapped. Enjoy your writing.
Need to delete that comment. Sounds like Lauren may be more susceptible to ghostie then her brother.
Sounds like Lauren may be more susceptible to ghostie her brother.