Everyone has a secret, people aren't always as they seem.
hmm Eva is sort of meh, but I can still see her view point. Who doesn't want attention?
ha the two comments below used the word 'captivated' which actually is a perfect description. the plot is familiar but the words are prettier.
I'm taken back, in shock, unlike most stories here,
this flows beautifully together.
Somethings you should consider fixing are :
paragraphs & cut sentences.
This would make it easier on the reader.
The story plot is captivating & has a good start.
I'll be sure to check out more soon! (:
dang ... if i could i'd flip her off that's just mest up man ...
@Cqari2Sweet haha, thanks so much! I'm new on here is why. =]
Idk why people arent voting for this story! I mean this story is awesome! :D