The Target

The Target

3.2K Reads 46 Votes 6 Part Story
Katie Robertson By crazychic911 Updated Apr 07, 2011

Five years ago, Ashley was kidnapped by a bunch of thugs, who held her hostage for $1,000,000. She escaped, but still have the mental scars of what she saw and experianced. Now she has been getting funny feelings when she is in public, and also having many different horror dreams all about the same "Mystery Man." She realized that this "Mystery Man" is not just a bad guy in her dreams, but a real criminal. He is out in search of her to get revenge for what she did to his gang long ago. The stalker finally gets her, and she puts up a struggle. Will she live? Will Ashley survive to tell the story? Does she escape?

crazychic911 crazychic911 Apr 04, 2011
@SomeGirl Thanks for the input. I went back aand tried to straighten up the tenses problem. I also changed the part about the gun too. 
Sarkey-Kiss Sarkey-Kiss Apr 04, 2011
This is a good introduction.  As stated below, you just need to edit a few things and reconsider some word choice maybe and it would be even better.  I'm going to continue reading.
livexlaughxlovexo0 livexlaughxlovexo0 Apr 01, 2011
great introduction and nice writing style. I agree. all you really need is to edit and get this story read! it would be a really popular story no doubt. :)
crazychic911 crazychic911 Apr 01, 2011
@ellamimikate Thank you for the advice! I will edit it the next chance I get.
KAFrak KAFrak Apr 01, 2011
@crazychic911 I usually read a lot of other poems..give honest reviews and ask them to return the favor
KAFrak KAFrak Apr 01, 2011
The writing is good and this worked well as an intro. Not much bad to say. Now the hard part is promoting this.
                              
                              
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